Hello, I need help with editing my personal essay (its probably re-writing the whole thing) It a personal essay for post-bacc program. The topic is Person that had great impact in my life or a movie/book/art that had great influence in my life. I just wrote it in like 20min so it was very unorganized. Because it is my personal story, i got emotional and the tone/wording is very childish and whining. If you could make the tone more calm and sophisticated that would highly appreciated. Since its personal essay for admission, there are no instructions. It just have to be maximum 2 page (not including the post thingy. you will know when you open the not even draft worth paper) If you have any questions feel free to let me know, since it's a personal story and essay I think it would be better to communicated with each other. I am totally fine with any personal questions.