1. The introduction provides little proof of your understanding regarding the question. Are we discussing nation-states or supranational organizations? What are the criteria for a nation-state to be sovereign? The thesis statement is not readily apparent. 2.The first two body paragraphs read more like the introduction 3.Discussing factors that threaten sovereignty shows broad research. However, it does not clearly answer the question - "should all nation-states be sovereign?" 4.This paper only begins to answer the question on page 6. Please restructure the paper such that the answer to the question begins at the end of the introduction (thesis statement) and continues all through the essay, in each body paragraph, and in the conclusion. 5.A good amount of research done. 6.Your reference page should begin on a totally new page. That is page 9, not page 8.